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Post by Inuyasha on Jun 6, 2004 20:40:58 GMT -5
I wlak up to Peter and shake his hand.
Hello i am Inuyasha.
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Post by Peter "The Owl" on Jun 7, 2004 1:37:09 GMT -5
I said third person, your using first. Try again please. And add some flare to it. Descirbe the room we're in, or the way the sound of your foot step sounds as you walk, maybe the sound your cloths make, or perhaps a stray thought you have. Flavor it.
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Post by Inuyasha on Jun 7, 2004 20:05:22 GMT -5
Ok but first, tell me why i have to speak in third person??
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Post by Inuyasha on Jun 12, 2004 0:21:42 GMT -5
Inuyasha walks up as his cloths scrap together, Inuyasha looks around the room looking for Peter, but all he sees are white walls all around him.
Hello Peter.
Inuyasha sees him from a distance. Inuyasha walks up to him slowly.
Inuyasha shakes his hand and looks in his eyes as he shakes Peters hand.
Inuyasha looks at Peter waiting for a responce.
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Post by Yuber on Jul 30, 2004 17:33:23 GMT -5
"Excuse me for interupting this mind-numbingly boring session, but when you speak in the third person, try to use more pronouns, please, if you would."
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